something euclidean

This poem has potential to be fun to read, but it is too long, too confusing [not really in of itself, but it's hard to keep any idea straight with ...

I liked this when I read it for the contest and I like it now. The whole poem hinges on a dreamy kind of feeling; it seems like the atmosphere ...

I did AP Lit last year and it wasn't that bad. Considering how much you read, both online and off, you won't have as hard a time as some people ...

Aspen. i. I remember the night of my birth. If I could pretend there were music playing in the background, it would be sad and distorted. [she looks over my ...

^same. I keep a notebook for snippets and ideas or first drafts of short stories; book lists and contest themes have snuck in there as well. Writing about my day-to-day ...

I enjoyed reading this and I enjoyed how the voice behind this is different from a lot of these poems; it was more sedate and direct, light and dignified, maybe ...

The chess/politics metaphor is a good one, and it could work very well if you expanded it for this poem. Still, it's something that's been done before, so you might ...

I don't..really..read poetry. Like, published stuff. -hides- I second that! -_- I'm trying to find more books of poetry to read so I can take my own advice. [It's amazing ...

this is the first half. The man who lost his shadow. By the time Edgar realized he had lost his shadow, it was long gone – it might have been ...

Why are the feelings there? what are they like? Can you describe them, compare them to something, tell a story with these feelings? This is all very matter-of-fact and while ...

I think that all the pop culture stuff in bold is really distracting; all the names demand we pay attention to them and make meaning out of them, rather than ...

I don't really like poems that are all nature and things like this is, or it's so... hmmm I'm not sure of the word. They seem kind of purposeless, I ...

Hm... this poem had some really beautifully simple images, especially here: sometimes the stars sing songs; they sing of days hope had wings and sometimes the sky keeps secrets; never ...

Some more details would be nice, as Clau said; part of the appeal of this is that it's simple and straightforward, but you can still include detail and emotion without ...

The only obvious error in the iambic tetramater is that 'squirrel' has two syllables, even if you mostly say it 'squirl', so that it throws off the form a little ...